Copy Edit The World

The green-sheet for my Jour 135 class has the mistake of adding a coma after March. When a month and year are used as a date there does not need to be a coma between the two.

In my green-sheet for Music 120, the word jazz does not need to be capitalized. In fact, later in the same syllabus it has jazz written lowercase.


A direct mail advertisement I recently received has the word "repipe" multiple times and in very bold writing. The problem with this is the fact that "repipe" is not a word. What they should have wrote is "re-pipe."


Another direct mail piece I have is for Honda. In the copy write for the ad, there are unnecessary capitalization. You can see in this picture, the words "Advertised Price" do not need to be capitalized.

Word of the Week #8

Ryan Kunis
MCOM 100W
M/W 12:00pm
Word #78
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Word: Foray

Source:
San Jose Mercury News article
Title: Sarah Palin wonders: Why can't she impersonate Tina Fey on '30 Rock'?
by Julie Bosman, New York Times

"The McCain campaign tightly limits Palin's availability to her traveling press corps, bu during the rare foray to the back of her campaign plane in the last several weeks, she has told reporters that she "would love to" make a guest appearance on "SNL.""

Definition: (Noun)
1. a quick raid, usually for the purpose of taking plunder. Vikings made a foray on the port.
2. a quick, sudden attack: The defenders made a foray outside the walls.
3. an initial venture: a successful foray into politics.

(verb - used without object)
4. to make a raid; pillage; maraud.
5. to invade or make one's way, as for profit or adventure: foreign industries foraying into U.S. markets.

(verb- used with object)
6. to ravage in search of plunder; pillage.

The final goal was made in overtime when the San Jose Sharks offense executed a flawless foray on the Philadelphia Flyers' defense.

Mystery Character

With her librarian style brown hair and thin-framed glasses, she is often referred to as a MILF. Her fair skin and amazingly white-toothed smile give her an untypically cute appearance for a person in her position. She is always dressed conservatively and professionally, as she should. She may not be the smartest woman or the most experienced, but she has come a long way. Many people are dumbfounded over the statements that she makes and often times those statements are heavily criticized by the entire country. She is also known for her somewhat outlandish thinking toward the use of firearms and knowledge of prehistoric dates. She is accustom to cold weather and a big fan of hockey because of it. In fact, she has even dropped the puck for a season opener for the NHL. There are so many qualities to this woman that make her a great person, but there are even more qualities that scare the entire United States of America.

Word of the Week #7

Ryan Kunis
MCOM 100W
M/W 12:00pm
Word #7
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Word: Incondite

Source:
Article - Australia burns ... while the bureaucrats bumble
By Tom Robinson

"Tom, this is another incondite article dealing with fire management."

Definition: (Adjective)
1. Ill-constructed; unpolished: incondite prose.
2. Crude; rough; unmannerly.

All I kept thinking about was the incondite bridge finally collapsing when it was my turn to cross.

Word of the Week #6

Ryan Kunis
MCOM 100W
M/W 12:00pm
Word #6
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Word: Arduous

Source:
Article - Restoring water supply 'arduous task'
by Guan Xiaofeng (China Daily)

"Authorities are facing an arduous task to restore water supplies to areas hit by last Monday's earthquake, an official has said."

Definition: (Adjective)
1. Requiring great exertion; laborious; difficult; an arduous undertaking.
2. Requiring or using much energy and vigor; strenuous: making an arduous effort.
3. Hard to climb; an arduous path up the hill.
4. Hard to endure; full of hardships; severe: an arduous winter.


Ryan knew what he was getting into when he signed up for too many classes, but he never realized just how arduous the semester would be.

Word of the Week #5

Ryan Kunis
MCOM 100W
M/W 12:00pm
Word #4
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Word: Altruism

Source:
Hazards, Risks of Earthquakes and Volcanoes
By Abbott

"One effect is an increase in suicides, but another is an increase in altruism."

Definition: (Noun)
1. The principle or practice of unselfish concern for or devotion to the welfare of others.
2. Animal Behavior. Behavior by an animal that may be to its disadvantage but that benefits others of its kind, as a warning cry that reveals the location of the caller to a predator.
3. Unselfish concern for the welfare of others; selflessness.
4.Zoology Instinctive behavior that is detrimental to the individual but favors the survival or spread of that individual's genes, as by benefiting its relatives.


In honor and memory of Sam, a ceremony was held to recognize the altruism that he showed while saving several children from a burning bus.

Journal Writing #2 - Media Audiences

Bailout Bill In The Media

A major topic in the news these days has circled around the $700 billion financial bailout bill that has many Americans nervously skeptical about. With the potential of a staggering economical impact on our country, this issue has been raised over and over again in all forms of the media. To make sure that the proper information is passed to the American readers or viewers it is valuable to compare the different medium platforms.

The San Jose Mercury News ran an article September 27, 2008, titled “Congress Pushes Closer to Bailout,” which covers the story from both a Republican and Democratic unbiased perspective. The article is 21 paragraphs long, equivalent to about a quarter of a page newspaper size, and includes nine sources that consist of representatives of both parties, quotes from the presidential candidates, McCain and Obama, as well as President Bush. Surprisingly, an article with a complex concern of financial numbers does not include any graphs or charts that might be beneficial to readers who could view comparisons of banking statistics.

During the early afternoon of September 27th, CNN aired a brief look at the same topic of the bailout bill. A mere one minute and thirty-nine second news report discussed the issue with a strong angle through the presidential debate that took place the day before. The report included two sources, video clips of the debate with Obama and McCain’s view on the subject and then a response from American citizens on the subject. The difference between the two mediums was very distinct. The newspaper was very informative of the facts and what the discussion in general is. The televised news report gave a specific angle of the topic through the debate and the viewer’s response.

An online coverage of the bailout bill from the New York Times gave a 13-paragraph discussion similar to that of the newspaper. A significant difference between the two medias is the more recent information of the online article that gives a few newer updates on the planning of the bailout bill and a much lower supply of sources, which were only four sources. The sources consisted of Republican and Democratic representatives and the President of the United States. Compared to the televised report, the online coverage was unbiased and fact driven mirroring the style of the newspaper report and did not take a narrower angle of the subject, like it did on CNN.

The difference between the media platforms is very beneficial from my perspective. They all cover important information that all Americans should know about, but can still give an array of views and angles of how the issue affects our country.

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